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My parents declare that I’m too old to go trick-or-treating. I’m thrilled. This way I don’t have to admit that no one invited me to go with them. I’m not about to tell Mom and Dad that. Just to keep up appearances, I stomp to my room and slam the door I looked out my bedroom window; a group of kids was walking up the sidewalk. I see a pirate, a dinosaur, some fairies, and WITCHES. I stopped for a moment; the witches reminded me of last year. Last year our whole clan dressed up as witches. I didn’t want to think about this but I can’t forget those old times. I remember Rachel and I looked the best. The loud knock on my door disturbs me. I stopped staring at the window. I grabbed a book, so my parents think I’m doing something. I open the door. “What are you doing honey?” said my mom. I knew she was trying to cheer me up because she didn’t let me go trick-or-treating. I actually didn’t want to go because I had no one to go with. “Honey?” said my Mom. “Oh, I was just reading my book that I got today from the library, Dracula by Bram Stoker” I reply looking confused. “I was just checking” said my Mom as she goes back downstairs. I looked at the window again, but it kept on reminding of my ex-friends. I tried to sleep, but all the “KNOCK, KNOCKS” for trick-or-treating couldn’t let me sleep. I didn’t know what but something keeps on telling me to look out at the window, now I really want to go trick-or-treating. I couldn’t do anything; Heather is going walking with some little kids in the neighborhood, so their parents could stay home. Today I heard Rachelle talking to couple her friends about going to a party by one of her exchange students. I wish I could’ve got something like her, but my reputation is that bad that I wouldn’t get an invitation to my OWN funeral. How would I even think about getting some other invitation after that HUGE incidence happened at the last party? I guess that was my last invitation to anything!! All this thinking had to stop, or else I’ll have nightmares again about this. I go downstairs to get some water, thinking that would help me relax a bit. When I came back I jumped in my bed thinking that I’m “stupid, brainless, awful, and horrible”. I try to sleep but I can’t just sleep like that, so I started reading my book. I wanted to think positive things about me rather than negative things like I always do. After five minutes the book started getting boring, and since today is Halloween, I feel like eating some chocolates. So I get a bag of chocolates from under my bed and started eating them.

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